i really liked you story because it isn't blatantly cool. It is almost a real life example. You really exemplify what teenagers act like. You demonstrate how teenagers really don't care what others think of them. They do what they think is cool and don't change for other people. Anyway, i feel somewhat connected to this story because i feel like this something we would do. But yeah, i really did like your story.
Sam
Omar,
i like how you were able to concentrate this story into a short walk down a hallway and really emphasize how teenagers get along. Its not just that the main character was cool but they all were because they were able to put their problems behind them and focus on what they were there for. It has dialogue which makes it a lot easier to picture and i could really feel like i am there.
Sam
Evan,
When i read this story on Friday i really liked it. I thought you really had the right idea when you were describing how he really is struggling internally on whether or not he wants to be cool and what the cost of cool really is. Was the B worth it to not look like such a smart kid. Is there really something wrong with smart. I think you did an excellent job of answering these questions and i really enjoyed seeing what you think "cool" really is
Sam
Arden, I really like how you focus on one main character and his ideas, i can see how your reflection of cool is put into both of them. The new mysterious kid and the big jerk. They both have their appealing sides and they also both have that unappealing side. Dakota is quiet and nice and either not known or liked. But hawk is probably big, good looking and just a bad boy. Every girl likes the jerk. That makes him cool. But i think you really did do a good job of looking at two different sides. Sam
Esther, i really liked your story because it kind of gives a sense of normality into what this cool or uncool thing is, you can see he lives to suit his own needs and because of that he was more of his own person, i don't know how he is in school but in home i think that the idea you were getting out was that he was just a normal person living a normal life, he was cool because he was normal. Anyway i really enjoyed it. Sam
Something that all the stories had involved was that they all were about some one who was different but similar. They all were being themselves and the conflict was always a struggle with their friends or themselves about being cool. With Arden's and Omar's stories you see how similar they are in that it is two clearly different people struggling for power. In Conor and Evan's stories it is about people struggling to fit in.
What i really found interesting is how all these stories had different roots but they all ended the same. and that is what the final result is. In Conor's story it ends in disappointment for the main character because he was shut down. In Esther's story it ends in her getting to school late because she procrastinated. In Arden's story it begins in a description and it ends up in a fight because of the discrepiscancy between the two. The point i am trying to make here is that these stories all start the same but end differently. Everyone has a different idea of cool and because of that everyone is going to write a different story
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