Thursday, November 19, 2009

Short Story (HW 24)

She walked into his school for the first time, It had that smell, the smell of bad school lunch and lead based paint. Anyone who has ever gone to a public school knows that smell but yet you never get used to it. The first thing she did was walk up to his friends and greet the same way that she always did, with the slight head nod and then a big hug. They stood there for a second looking around at each other and noticing what 2 months apart could do to them. For the first time it always looked like a lot. They were tan, taller and skinnier. Something that always seemed to fade away over the course of the year. They were in the middle of poking fun at each other when he came over. There was something about him too but this was not the usual changes. His hair was darker not lighter and he had this new glow about him. None of them said it, but they all knew it. How could someone look so different in just 2 months? They didn't dare say anything they just carried on as they always did. They sat and went over their summers one by one. To some people their group was cool and to others their group was a little nerdy. But they didn't care. They were all good friends. But it happened almost immediately. Other girls started noticing him too. They had never really taken a serious interest in him and now all of a sudden he was the center of attention. He was almost instantly popular. Within days he was the toast of the school. Everyone wanted to be him, or at least be like him. His friends were kind of lost in her sudden onset of power but he seemed unaffected by it. It was almost as if nothing had happened. He still hung out with his group. He still put up with them when she could have easily have pushed them away and moved on. It kind of confused her though, she didn't know what everyone saw in him. He was still his same old friend but now to everyone else he was the coolest person.She didn't know what to do but he was still her friend and because of that she was still happy.What made him so cool was that he didn't change because of what people thought of him. He was still the same person who he always was. It like the fame never got to him. Maybe it was because nothing got to him. He was always distanced. But who were we to judge, we were just like her. Thats what made our group so close. We didn't like change, so we kind of distanced ourselves from change. We just were ourselves. Maybe we didn't get what being cool meant, but then again, we just didn't really care.

4 comments:

  1. Sam,

    I really enjoyed your story, probably because I'm such a romantic and you really embodied how this guy had a thing for this girl with out flatly saying so in one sentence. You compressed the scene nicely and its easy to tell that your interpretation of cool is someone who doesn't think their too good for anyone.
    I think a reoccurring problem in high school is that when teenagers (especially girls) grow out of their awkward stages and into their good looks, they become superficial and egotistical over it. Its clear that an ideally cool girl to you would have confidence and modesty.

    Great job :)

    - Alicia

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  2. To Sam J,

    "What made her so cool was that she didnt change because of what people thouht of her." 'We didnt like change, so we kind of distanced ourselves from change. We just were ourselves. Maybe we didnt get what being cool meant, but then again, we just didnt really care." I totally agree with this quote you came up. Who even care if you are cool, at least you are still the same person inside. You came up with a pretty nice story of how a teenage girl grow up to worry about her looks and becoming cool, but it is still natural, but their personality is still the same. Good Job.

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  3. Sam, I think that you really got at how groups have a lot to do with popularity and being cool. The male character who becomes more popular and moves on is a theme that happens in this school often and is probably a familiar story to many people. I also think that you blended the two main characters well and they make the story not only realistic but very entertaining. The way the group reacts to the problems that they are all facing reminds me of a group in the 11th grade. Hmm I wonder who?
    anyway great work

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  4. "We just were ourselves. Maybe we didn't get what being cool meant, but then again, we just didn't really care." i love this line

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