To Quinn,
Just to start off, i really like your overall idea that technology is infact bad and doing more bad then good to us. Like how facebook is destroying our friendships and our addiction to technology is growing stronger by the day. The reason i choose to write the comment on this is because i really feel like this is your best work, you really start off strong by going in depth with you research on M.T.Anderson. Then you didn't stop, you really went in deep with your connections to facebook and how the technology we already we have is just like feed, we are only steps from having it already in our heads. That is what i really liked. It really brings our life and this book together. It shows us how we really aren't that far behind these people. Like how we have a "Feed" on facebook and how it keeps us updated on our friends recent activity, i just think things like that are really what are keeping us down. Some suggestions i have is to work on you grammar (small stuff), and to show the other side of the arguement. Show what good stuff is happening and how that can positively help us. You have some very contriditory ideas, such as how you said it was hard to live without talking to your girlfriend and similar stuff, but in your blog you talk about how stupid it all is. Maybe technology is stupid but what it is doing is genious. Other then that i really found you comment and especially this blog post to be very helpful in terms of seeing your point of view, which is something that i can use later on in this class as a start off point, so a million thanks. From,
Sam
To Will,
You really have some great ideas, just starting off with homework 13 i think you really prove a great point by showing us how feed is meant to show us who we are and by doing that causing us to change, because if we saw who we really were we wouldn't be very happy, than in 12 you prove a great point of how younger generations are frowned upon but older generations are respected for the things they did. Like what we are doing is disgraceful and stubborn or arrogant, we are wasting our lives and loosing our individuality. But in one or two generations we will be heroes for what we did and people will remember us for all the great things we did. But until then we are the punks. Then we get to the crown jewel. Number 13 is a work of art. You gave us the full truth. As uncensored as it may be you showed us how teenagers live and how different levels of anti social behavior and the effect it plays. How being detached from technology takes away contacting friends and brings on solitude. Then gorging yourself in technology is the exact same thing. If you don't leave the house so you can play video games then nothing has changed. These ideas could really be put to use on your art project with maybe a deeper study of the pysche of the teenage mind. Some of the biggest spots for improvement is the depth of your work. You have great ideas but you don't explain them. Its like the rough draft, you need to complete your work. Just take the time and finish your thoughts before moving on. But your ideas really do encourage some thought into who we are as people. And how the little things we do have a spiderweb effect. So thanks for your thoughts will
From,
Sam
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